Tlaki comes to Jozi by Noosie C. Petlele
My birth was a mistake. I was given the name Matlakala — meaning rubbish or something you do not want — because I was not supposed to have been born. Growing up, I pieced together the story of my birth from gossipy neighbours and sometimes from my maternal grandmother — my role model.
This story has been selected for the annual StoryTime anthology African Roar 2012, please go to the African Roar site for more info.
Tlaki comes to Jozi was written by Noosie C. Petlele.
Copyright © Noosie C. Petlele 2011.
Noosie C. Petlele is a South African born writer, artist, entrepreneur, and mother of three. She loves reading anything and everything, and intends to write romance thrillers the likes of American novelists Brenda Jackson and Sandra Brown, “before my hair goes 100% grey”.
8 comments:
A capturing subtle family love story about dreams and aspirations. It was one of those reads where I could not stop until the end, then disappointment because I wanted more: what is going to happen to Tlaki and Zee, will she get a job, or plainly, will all her dreams come true, or perhaps even, her fears that she could be forced into prostitution. Loved it. Tsela
I am glad you enjoyed the story. Yeah, it would me nice to find out what happens to Tlaki in Jozi, I agree...
Noosie
Tlaki, Tell Me More! Ok. Now that you got me all invested in Tlaki, and since he is NOT the pimp I feared he was, Zee, please advance the story. What happens next? Does he help her get/find a job? What do his cousins do? Are they students? Will this turn into a romance (as your beautiful artwork seems to indicate?) or are there more twists and turns? The opening is very strong, the unfolding on the way to Jozi is good. The imagery of Jozi is vivid in sight, sound and smell. If you are going to make this a novella or novel then I don't agree that it needs shortening; if it is to remain a short story then it will. But I hope that this is just the beginning! Keep writing and yes, Tlaki, tell me more!---Cheryl from Alpharetta, Georgia, USA
Thanks Cheryl,
I guess I will have to look into these people's lives and continue the story. This is a first trial. Give me time to recover before I plunge back in.
Noosie
Thanks Cheryl,
I guess I will have to look into these people's lives and continue the story. This is a first trial. Give me time to recover before I plunge back in.
Noosie
Good read Noosie.
I have a feeling tTaki's 'savior' may not be as cavalier as he seems! Something eerie about his generosity to a complete stranger..
That's an interesting observation Avi8r. Do not be so cynical, these things do happen. Maybe Tlaki has magic powers over him (he is bewitched) LOL... I will explore him further later, I promise. Thanks for your comment.
And so you must Noosie! There is much to unfold.. :)
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